Though
the story is named for Felix, Betty is the main character of “Felix Was
Here.” We spend the most time with her. We see how something as simple as hearing the
name Felix turns her life upside down.
She is a regular person trying to make her way through the world. Her goals in life are simple in the
beginning. Betty wants a good life with
her husband Bill. She doesn’t want them
to struggle for anything. She wants
comfort, which is something I think most people can relate to on some level.
Many characters
in fiction experience a jarring shift in worldview like this. We often find ourselves peering at the world
through the eyes of someone who was once content with their world, but
something happens to dramatically change that. We first see them when they’re still in their
element, and we go along on the journey with them as they discover that all is
not as it seems.
I’d like
to share an excerpt from “Felix Was Here” with all of you. In this excerpt, Betty find herself in a
quiet moment, and inside everything is chaotic.
That is, after all, what one would expect to feel when their entire
world is shifting in mysterious ways.
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Moonlight intermittently chased away
the deep shadows of the bedroom as a soft breeze fluttered the curtain. Betty
held the quilt firmly in place just below her chin as she tried to sink into
sleep. Slumber, however, remained elusive as Bill lay beside her, the soft
sounds of his breathing filling the room. After an hour or two, that sound
began to crawl under her skin and fester.
Inhale.
Felix.
Exhale.
Felix.
That pattern repeated on a loop until
nothing else in all the world remained. Susan’s sweet voice recited the name as
if it were barely even worth mentioning. As if it meant nothing. Yet it did. It
meant everything, but why?
Finally, the rhythmic nature of the
breathing and the repetition of the name lured her into sleep.
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Don’t
forget!
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Great excerpt, Laura. Your story is mesmerizing, and you've captured it splendidly! I can relate to that moment when you question your very existence. Congratulations!
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DeleteIt was a really great story!
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DeleteAn amazing story!!
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DeleteVery intrigued to know that Felix is not the MC. Brilliant work capturing the sleeplessness through just four words! Totally loved that.
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DeleteThanks for sharing an excerpt. Intriguing and well done! Keep up the great work!
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Sounds like an intriguing story. I don't usually read scifi but I want to know about Felix.
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Betty was a wonderful character. Thanks for sharing more about her.
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DeleteThat moment when we know we should know something! I loved this story.
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